Subject: LANGUAGE- Written Expression
Follow up Grade: 5 Primary
Duration: 30 minutes
General Aim: Acquisition of Skill (Expression)
Specific Aims: To review and assess a recent composition, "The Big Wave".
Basic Method: Expression
Preparation: Teacher: Compositions have been corrected, the most interesting or improved efforts selected, and examples for correction listed on the chalkboard.
Participants:
Step
1: Topic: The Big Wave Plan: 1.Buildup of wave 2.The ride
3.Success or failure Mood of tension, excitement.Wave as
character.Immediate setting of scene without preliminary
rambling. Preparation for
Experience The topic, possible events and
attempted mood of recent writing, is recalled through
reference to a photograph used for stimulation. Teacher comments on class
standards, commending improved or high standard
work. Step
2: Improved: Richards, Parker, Jackson
(i.e.student names) Well expressed: Hassal, Borrowman,
Duller The
Experience Selected children read sections or
entire compositions as class listens for evidence of items
listed in Step1 content. Step
3: Alternative titles: The
Surfer's Giant, The Challenge, Wave of the Day, The Cautious
Move Well expressed sentences,
imagery,apt vocabulary: "The waves thrashed and scarred the
rocks." "The board clawed through the
waves.As I curved the frothy foam sprayed
everywhere." "The wave began to spill over me
like steam from a boiling kettle." "Man and board seem like one,
fleeing in front of a towering giant of foam and fury, the
fin of the board ripping a thin white line down the face of
the wave ... The wave, as if in its dying agony, topples and
crashes and man and board skim into the beach, proud and
exhilarated." "Mean and fearful as it was, the
giant did not frighten the surfer." Sentences for
improvement: "I took a chance.I was on it. I was
screaming down the wave.It was breaking." (Try using
conjunctions or participial phrase) "I spotted a wave it was getting
closer it was like he was going to fall on me." (Punctuation
and/or use of conjunctions, rearrangement) "I got a firm grip on my board and
I was off slicing through it." (Ambiguity) Misuse of words: I was
riding famously well. I paddled till I reached
there. Spelling: monstrous, break
-brake, tidal Tense changes: "The surfer
was sitting on the board.He's getting ready and he's caught
it." Discussion Children comment freely on
compositions, teacher extending observations through
questioning.Sentences or paragraphs are re-read where
necessary. Examples from other sources are
read from the board and examined for literary merit or for
grammatical / spelling errors. The latter are examined for
improvement, and corrections are carried out on the board
with pupils' assistance. Step
4: Individual comments. Errors in books. Summing Up Students attempt oral evaluation of
class or individual achievement, suggesting possible changes
in approach to future work. Teacher commends individuals for
contribution to discussions. Children commence individual
correction of their work, teacher giving aid where
necessary.
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